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I try to write a little songs in English...

Posted by Janna on Tuesday, May 22, 2007

Hello, friends!
I think that you all understand an English language well and know it more and more better then I (mine is Russian)

Well, I learn it. I like to listen songs on your language and sing them.
 
And I try to write my first own little songs in English. But may be anything wrong in my lyrics...  So I need to know your opinion about it    

:)) 

Here is one song


    Close Your Eyes

1.  Close your eyes
    Come into my dream
    Hear me tonight
    I`ll be right here

    Waiting for you
    Come in, my dear
    What can I do
    To make it real?


2.  Baby, I know
    I'll give you my all
    All for your kiss
    Because I miss you so

     And I
    Can`t sleep tonight
    You are always
     In my mind

    Baby, I can`t sleep tonight
    You are always in my mind


3.  Close your eyes
    You know what I mean
    Welcome into
    My sweetest dream
 
    I`ll be with you
    Right here, my dear
    What can I do
    To make it real?

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11 comments on “I try to write a little songs in English...”

Joanchek Says:
Tuesday, May 22, 2007 @9:54:25 AM

Your lyrics are fine, Janna.  Your English is much better than my Russian!

Jacinto Guevara Says:
Tuesday, May 22, 2007 @7:17:58 PM

Close your eyes

Hear me tonight

Come into my dreams

We'll be alright.

Jacinto Guevara Says:
Tuesday, May 22, 2007 @7:28:20 PM

2. Just for your kiss

And all that I miss

My soul's in a knot

I need what you've got.

Jacinto Guevara Says:
Tuesday, May 22, 2007 @7:32:00 PM

3B I'm here with you

     Our time is so dear

     Alone, just us two

     Let's make it so real.

anetc99 Says:
Tuesday, May 22, 2007 @7:37:38 PM

hi janna,

well done! the english in your song is very well done!
was it difficult to learn the roman alphabet for it?
how long have you been studying english?

annette

Just Bill Says:
Tuesday, May 22, 2007 @7:59:37 PM

Hello, Janna

Your lyrics are very nicely done!  I am anxious to hear the melody with the lyrics.  Please post it here when you record it.

Well done!

Bill Breen ("just Bill")

Janna Says:
Wednesday, May 23, 2007 @4:33:58 AM

Jacinto Guevara  Wow! This lyrics seems like from my song :)

anetc99  No, it is not too difficult 'couse I love it. I study English all my life, but now I have not a teacher, BHO helps me sometimes, I must thank you all for speaking with me! :)

Just Bill   Thanks! Today I've tryed to record my voice with the melody of this song, it's alright! When it will be ready, of course, I'll post it here for you!

Janna Says:
Wednesday, May 23, 2007 @4:40:07 AM

Joanchek Do you speak Russian?!

banjo25 Says:
Wednesday, May 23, 2007 @5:27:35 PM

It looks fine to me. I wouldn't change anything. It would be more common to say you are (were) always "on" my mind but that is now too cliche due to the Willie Nelson song.

And "Welcome into my sweetest dream" could just be "welcome to my sweetest dream" but I like "into" better because it gives you the visual of the dream being an actual place that you could walk into.

you probably will find that by not knowing the language as well as your native language you actually have an advantage at times in saying things in a more creative way without even realizing what you are doing

RODNEYJOHNSON Says:
Friday, May 25, 2007 @2:19:55 PM

Leave it just like it is.The 'in'your mind has a nicer hook than the worn out dull 'on' my mind!I like it,sounds like it is from the heart as much as the head.

Janna Says:
Friday, May 25, 2007 @10:11:56 PM

Ok! Thank you, friends!

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